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Drunkin_Dog Posted: Jan 25 2004, 07:09 PM

I wrote this a while ago, and I'm a lil hesitant in posting it, but.. I wrote this for my best friend last summer... tell me what you think

I never said you are my life

Just the best damn part of it

Your are worth more stars then five

And more candles then are lit

Don`t hang with me

I`ll bring you down

You should live with glee

Without sadness, nor a frown

I dream I hold you, close and tight

I never want to let go, infear you`ll leave me

So I hold you with all my might

Until you ask that I release thee

Then I wake, cold and shivering

Though I`m not, I feel alone

Then I relise, there`s no point in fearfull quivering

Because you are there, and I`ve seen the light which you have shown

I know it sucks, but whatever, tell me what you guys and girls think

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Twilight_Star Posted: Jan 25 2004, 08:11 PM
I actually like it.. you shouldn't be hard on yourself you write good